aisuroma's art Reviews on Newgrounds

['Empress of Tides']

I really appreciate that this artwork tells a story and has developed a fully realized character for Ariel that shows her journey to reach "lvl 99". While this piece is not as cleanly or expertly rendered as some of the other entries, I believe that you really put some though and effort into keeping the character interesting but also recognizable. The colors are really nice and Ariel stands out with her golden armor really well. I think to take this piece to the next level you could have done well with adding more effects to make it flashy or using some depth of field tricks to add to the depth of the piece.

Djoresh responds:

Thank you for taking the time to write this feedback. I ran into a wall with my current experience and had no idea how to push this piece further. I know you can't reply twice, but if you would be willing to message me to give some visual reference or educational books or video's to a 'flashier' / 'depth of field tricks', so I can learn what to look out for and keep it balanced, I would be more then appreciative. You have my thanks regardless.

[It's-a me, Mario!]

This is very well rendered, but some of the shortcuts are a little too visible and there are some texture mishaps here and there.
This is very pretty, but in terms of the contest this was made for, I personally do not find this concept very imaginative nor creative. Let's be honest here, it's been done before by hundreds if not thousands of artists. Other than the horns on Mario's head, I don't see too much unique about this concept. It's nice that you sourced your reference, but there is such a thing as too heavily referencing another's artwork and style. It's fine to be inspired, but in the future, take the steps to make things your own. There are so many Yoshi tyrannosaurus rexes out there, but I like that the interpretation depicted here is a lot less skeletal (much less Jurassic Park) than some others.

Yenba responds:

Thanks for taking the time to type all these. However, I do have to say that it is pretty hard to make something unique when you're trying to redesign something very very well-known. Because just like you said, "it's been done before by hundreds if not thousands of artists"

I apologize if you don't see lil 17yr old me as someone creative and imaginative. But as an artists, I will do whatever it is that I want to do.

[Tradigital Owl]

This is really cute. I'm a bit biased, though, because I really love owls. I'm having a bit of difficulty telling if the picture is completed, though. It seems like some of the wings are there but it's not finished, in a way. It makes me question if you hit the edges in your sketchbook and then covered it up with the leaf texture. One of the ways around this is to either purchase a larger pad or to take multiple pages and use masking tape to tape them together on the reverse side. This way you don't have to sacrifice making your drawing smaller to fit on the size page you have.
I checked out your instagram, and I think you cropped the picture a lot better there. There is so much excess space that takes away from the focal point. The leaves also feel like a massive after thought. They are just a texture brush and it would have been interesting to see more than just maple leaves. The brush or image used also is fairly pixelated at larger sizes, so it does not mesh well with the crisp, gritty pencil lines.
What I would love to see from you next is to do a study on furs and feathers since instead of more accurately portraying those textures, you are really just representing them with lines or penciled patches. I feel that if you worked more in that direction, you could give your work a more realistic touch because right now it comes across as a little lazy. Push yourself!

[this is tradigital]

Hey, you just linked to a file that's stored on your computer and was opened in a web browser. To link to your WIP, you're going to have to upload it elsewhere and right-click the picture and select "copy link address" to get a link to the picture.
Good luck with your entry!

nikduty responds:

thank you i am going to post it on youtube

[Tradigital]

I checked out your Instagram page and I was pleased seeing all your artwork! I hope you continue to do art and I look forward to seeing things that you do in the future! With regards to this particular piece, I felt that the composition was quite plain seeing as how there isn't really anything going on in the background. This flower could really be held up against anything and that could help sell a particular mood or story to your picture and evoke a desired emotion.
The rose is really well done and printing it out gave this really velvety quality to it that reminded me of some of the artwork my grandmother would paint. The rose is a bit "flat" in terms of color depth, but I kind of like that quality of it and it makes me want to see many other roses painted in this way as a printed fabric on clothing.

["You Dishonored Me"]

Hilarious. Had me and my boyfriend laughing at the concept. I like the texture you gave Bob Ross for his hair and beard.
I felt like the physical splitting of the canvas and having half the arm cell shaded and the other half painted maybe wasn't the best choice because it wasn't really carried through in the background, so it just looks like a visual distortion that maybe my field of vision's gone blurry.

[Brought to Life]

This was kind of a pleasure to zoom into. I would have loved to see an even amount of detail throughout, though. The keyboard clearly doesn't have the same level of detail as that beautifully smooth tablet, it makes me wonder if you painted over an existing picture and added details like the crumpled paper later. I feel like the wads of paper and the images on the screen really ruin the effect here because you haven't put the same amount of effort.
There's a strange uncanny feeling to this picture, and I can't quite put my finger on it. It may be the perspective lines not lining up (back of the table) or the computer monitor and stand being oddly separated. It may be one of those monitors attached to a crane in the back, but the viewer won't know that from this angle, so it looks strange.
I also feel like the Spiderman and Spongebob was a poor choice, they are very jarring to see included. It may have something to do with the color choice being that bright cyan against those harsh yellows and reds. I think it would have been interesting to see more of an interaction with the environment and more of a blending of the cartoon characters into the real world. Just throwing some ideas out here, for example, there could be webs shooting out from Spiderman's wrists, or the use of overlapping on Spongebob's finger to make it seem like it's protruding from the screen. Simply placing his finger in front of the earphone cord could help here.
I also feel like this area could have benefited strongly from using a more realistic texture and painting technique on the portions of the figures that are outside the screen, especially to incorporate the mood and color tone of the room on them.
Overall, I feel like some portions of this are really well done, but I would have liked to see all that energy applied everywhere.

[A Newcomer]

That's pretty funny.

HRonNG responds:

Thanks! :D

[The Line]

I think you did very well for painting something you wouldn't normally paint. I feel like this is a nice improvement over some of your other drawings, too! The main thing I wanted to give some advice on is to watch your anatomy, you've lost the neck entirely on the blonde woman's body. Form your line drawing I can see that you originally drew the shoulder there, but it didn't translate well in the end. Keep in mind that the shoulders are really the top of the body, aside from the neck and you're not going to really have that excess above them going towards the head.
I think the problem also arises from an incorrectly placed shoulder as well. What I'm about to say is a very important piece of advice: try and make the gestures and positions you're drawing with your own body, and if it's painful to contort that way, keep that in mind when you're drawing your gestures. If you were to draw a box in perspective around the blonde woman's hips, and then to draw another one around her chest and back, you would find that she's been twisted at an unrealistic angle. This goes for the feet and legs as well.
I find the color scheme to be quite pleasing and I enjoy the symbolism you've injected it with. What I would have loved to see was a greater use of value in this picture, darker dark values, namely. A good tip is to put your picture under a black and white filter and see if the picture has a good balance. I can see already from what you've done that you've made the two people the darkest ones, but I'd like to see that taken to a heightened level.

Artist-Lost responds:

Thank you for the well thought out critique. I don't often receive these outside of a school environment so I definitely appreciate it. I fixed some of the anatomy issues you brought up as well as fleshed out the painting a bit more with some new forms and boosts to contrast. I'm liking the values a lot more and the scene flows better now, thank you again!